: I wanted to write you a more detailed review, but I honestly can't say much. I'm not very good at rhyme/verse/etc so I won't comment on that. Constructive criticism! * "She **wondered** the woods" - should be **wandered**, I assume. Maybe not? It's Lulu after all. * You didn't go much into the darker themes of Lulu (or the "fair folk" of mythology in general). There was a hint of it with, "Imprisoned in the towers," and, "All thoughts go to waste," and I hoped for more sinister lines like these. I realise it's meant to be light and whimsical though. Really nice work. I'm surprised this one didn't make the finalists.
Thank you for the detailed review! I fully agree with your second point. The original plan was that the story was about to trully begin around the time when "the Dark Lord Pix" was found, but at that point it already took me around 4 hours and when I looked at the script and how much more I had to turn into poem, I gave up and ended it up abruptly. It is a shame, but when I considered that my chances of winning were really slim and the fact that not many people would be interested in a Lulu poem, I decided there's no real point in wasting so much time working on it when I could use that time on my comic, which a lot more people like. For the "wonder" part though, I was afraid people would not notice it or think it off as a mistake, but I actually took a bit of artistic liberty and used "wondered" as in Lulu doubting what she is seeing, because she was searching for Pix.
: I would be interested as well if I made it into the top 49, maybe if you private message them saying their entry made it through the first round and everyone else that didn't thanking them for contributing would probably be the best way round without hurting anyone's feeling.
Meh, I wouldn't trust a single word from such an approach. You could send a private message saying this to literally all 172 participants.
Declined (EUNE)
: It was very cute, you went with a format that fit perfectly for the champion. A rather bold move to present it like this, which certainly paid off for you. I personally aren't really interested in stuff like that, don't get me wrong I only really enjoyed 1.7% of the entries but that's just me, I see Draven I like, and then there was that one entry that was like.... 4 lines long I thought was funny although not particularly relevant for the contest.
I understand, thank you for taking the time to give me your input~~!
: A suggestion for those who're discouraged by not making the final 16: don't take Riot's writing/forum staff as the ultimate authority on creative writing, grammar, or fantasy fiction. I gather it was a subjective judgement based on fairly narrow criteria in the context of a single fantasy universe (and in fairly stressful circumstances for the amount of content they had to review); not being top 16 doesn't mean your writing is poor, nor are they necessarily the best source of constructive criticism. Case in point: some official League lore isn't particularly well written - or in any case could be improved upon - and the writers' use of English isn't always perfect (there are multiple errors in this announcement post!). _This is in no way intended as a flame towards the staff._ Fanfic competitions are a great idea and take a lot of thankless effort to organise, especially with so many entries and in such a short time period. Just don't feel like Tolkien or R. E. Howard has personally trashed your work if you didn't win. Hell, if any of you want some advice from a random internet person I'd be happy to comment on your entries.
I'll take you up on your offer! Could you please review [mine](https://boards.eune.leagueoflegends.com/en/c/fan-fiction/Fz9gPwBw-never-one-contest-entry-the-dark-adventures-of-lulu-and-pix)? :D
Declined (EUNE)
: Well.... sort of, more accurately it was wether someone was able to express their story in an eligible manner. For instance, there were some entries who ended abruptly or didn't convey the story properly. Some didn't quite fit the Partnership theme. I read a couple of really ambitious entries that wanted to try something new, in particular this [one](https://boards.eune.leagueoflegends.com/en/c/fan-fiction/lHQnYdgj-never-one-contest-entry-kindred-a-triple-haiku-poem) is a great example, while it's incredibly well made, there's just not enough substance to it to justify letting it progress. I can't give you a blanket statement for how all the entries were handled, simply because they were so varied, that any specific criteria we set out would be useless.
Could you please tell me what you thought about my entry? I'm interested in both the good and the bad :D
: What about the people they would have hurt by typing what they did? Before I replied to their comment I took the time to read their story and visit their profile, they had entered such competitions in the past and had a very different tone when they were selected at top 10 in the Odyssey Fanfic. And because they didn't make that same milestone this time they decided to throw a tantrum and insult others? 'K bye then' is me disregarding their hateful message and if peeps don't like that then...Bye then.
You had many ways to go about it instead of simply dismissing their feelings. One possibility would be trying to educate the other readers about the person's feelings and make everyone understand that nothing from what he wrote should hurt them. Another option would be trying to soothe the person's pain and maybe make them realize that insulting everyone won't help them accomplish their goal, which might even lead to them apologizing! You instead decided to hurt them even more! What if law punished criminals with death sentence? What if said criminal commited his crime by mistake or terribly regrets his actions? Would it be fair? I have the feeling you are trying to extinguish fire with fire, but instead you call it orange water.
Declined (EUNE)
: It's alright, I had to fight pretty hard to make sure there were some extra prizes in there for you guys. We also contemplated giving out some extra rewards to entries who deserved to be highlighted for whatever reason but didn't make it to the finalist list, something along the lines of 'personal favorite' or 'honorable mentions' but it isn't that easy to pull off as it sound. Although I'm quite interested to know what you think of the idea, and if possible how you'd implement it.
I think no prizes are needed for such an idea. By simply listing some entries as "personal favourite" maybe along with the reason the judge liked it that much would be more than enough to make the author happy. But then again, if the list is too long, it won't feel like the entry really was special, so I would stick with only the ones a judge had really strong feelings for.
: > [{quoted}](name=LilMissMadthing,realm=EUW,application-id=IRLJz88n,discussion-id=xK72R9s0,comment-id=000b0005,timestamp=2019-03-18T23:38:30.791+0000) > > -snip- K Bye then. Arrogant; self-absorbed, spoilt child whose salty about the results so they feel the need to drag others down. Congratulations to **all** the wonderful entries that made it and a big **thank you** to those who took the time out of their day to judge the 200+ stories that were entered. That's over 200k words to read through in total. They didn't have to create this competition at all but they did. Giving League players a chance to share their writing talents with the community. So thank you for that. And to the lovely LilMissMadthing. Don't get bitter get better. ######Moderator Note: I snipped the quote as no one should be subjected to read that.
> [{quoted}](name=TeaPartyTibbers,realm=EUW,application-id=IRLJz88n,discussion-id=xK72R9s0,comment-id=000b00050001,timestamp=2019-03-18T23:59:19.548+0000) > > K Bye then. You say this and think you are better than him. Nice attitude. While I agree LilMisMadthing's language was a bit vulgar and undervaluing other people's accomplishments, I can understand his/her feelings. He/she is frustrated that they probably worked really hard on the entry, yet it was not appreciated the way they had hoped for. While taking this anger out on everyone else is definitely the wrong way to go about it, you have to understand that he/she is also a wonderful human being that appreciates literature, just like yourself. Contrary to you, I took his/her words as a "I really wanted everyone to like my creation, I wanted everyone to like me and be my friend!". I do not feel a drop of negative emotions towards what they said, on the contrary, I feel closer to them and I definitely won't let them go! I won't allow you to tell them "K Bye then"! I want him/her to write more beautiful creations! We need MORE people like them! Instead of trying to soothe a person whose feelings got really hurt, you try to hurt them more by telling them to leave, that nobody wants them! You, sir, I do not like!
: I read a lot of the stories posted for this competition and I need to say they were all so damn good. Please dont be sad that yours didnt place in the top, I am sure it was just incredibly difficult to pick from such a large list. There wasnt any maximum no. of words required, but as said there was just a lot of really good entries (including yours) and I am sure once you read all of the finalists you will agree that all of them deserve their spot. Not that you wouldnt think that, just that its then more likely to realize how difficult it must have been to choose only 16 :( Keep on writting!!
I would still like to know what criteria they used...
Zaffron (EUW)
: [Fan Fiction Contest] Final 16 Announced: Vote Now for the Winner!
What were the criteria used for elimination? I was pretty confident that even if I wouldn't win, I'd maybe place in the top 10 for the uniqeness of my story. It really breaks my heart to know it wasn't liked by the team. :( Is it because it wasn't close enough to 1000 words? Because there was no rule for the minimum amount of words...
CurseOfLife (EUNE)
: Jinx song... give it a name
Awesome song, but "Wow did you saw her??" -> did you see
Christea (EUW)
: I really enjoyed reading this! Well done its brilliant. :) <3
Thank you! I'm really happy you liked it ^_^ <3
: > [{quoted}](name=Lulu the Support,realm=EUNE,application-id=IRLJz88n,discussion-id=a6yfxy8P,comment-id=0000,timestamp=2019-03-05T18:19:40.859+0000) > > I don't think you did a bad job at all! You don't need rhymes to write a lighthearted story! And although there were a few grammar and formulation mistakes (I suggest proofreading to correct them), overall the story kept me intrigued. I wasn't sure where you were going to take the plot at the start, and was fearing nothing would happen, but you proved me wrong. I wasn't expecting to see character development in only 1000 words. Writing about how Riggles learned to fly was a fantastic idea! Thank you so much! I'll work on everything you said because this made me so happy knowing someone actually read my story I put my hard work into, and I put a lot of work into it too because this is the first time I ever tried writing outside of my boring English classes! I soon realised that 1,000 words were no where near enough for me to write a story with a plot that made actual sense, so I'm so sorry if it came out as random with no plot. I had a whole idea set in motion as my origninal story had an actual plot, and the way Riggles learned how to fly was much more interesting! That 1,000 word limit is my new enemy! {{sticker:sg-janna}} If I ever do have a full, well developed story for this you'll totally be the first person I share it with! Thank you so much again! <3 It made my day C:
Haha, I'm glad it made you happy! And I cant wait to hear the full story. I'm curious what the creature in the forest was!
: > [{quoted}](name=Lulu the Support,realm=EUNE,application-id=IRLJz88n,discussion-id=Fz9gPwBw,comment-id=00020000,timestamp=2019-03-05T18:42:02.051+0000) > > Awww <3 Thank you! Reading your kind words warmed my heart. I also read your story and gave you some feedback! No problem! It also makes me happy I can make someone else happy c: (By the way, I definitely think this is my favourite! It's just so good when I read it over and over, and it never gets boring. Honestly amazing!) {{sticker:sg-kiko}}
: This was amazing! I've now realised what a bad job I had done on my story :( this is my favourite so far tho! {{sticker:sg-lux}}
Awww <3 Thank you! Reading your kind words warmed my heart. I also read your story and gave you some feedback!
: Never One Contest Entry: Tristana & Riggles
I don't think you did a bad job at all! You don't need rhymes to write a lighthearted story! And although there were a few grammar and formulation mistakes (I suggest proofreading to correct them), overall the story kept me intrigued. I wasn't sure where you were going to take the plot at the start, and was fearing nothing would happen, but you proved me wrong. I wasn't expecting to see character development in only 1000 words. Writing about how Riggles learned to fly was a fantastic idea!
: I love good criticism, and i must say i agree with you but my intention wasn't to build a romantic relationship, but more of a beginning and sudden end to a friendship. The blushing was more of an embarrassment moment than romantic note. I guess i failed to interpret that in my story. Also i included the"My" and the end so the reader knows that Lulu still remembers him and still cares about her long lost friend. Since most of her memories are distorted for the Glade. Thank you so much for being honest with me!
Hm, now I understand, that makes perfect sense! In that case I feel that saying "That's a friendly Purple Star" would have conveyed the message more clearly.
: It's very cute! I think you captured her whimsical personality perfectly, it's such a contrast to my Swain story (and after writing for hours about our Supreme Edge Lord Leader it's nice to think of Lulu and Pix for a change.) Very well done!
Thank you! Haha, you managed to make me curious and read your story as well. ^_^ I wrote what I feel about it there!
: Never One Contest Entry: The_Raven's_Shadow
Holy moly, this is so dark! I LOVE IT! I have one question though: What did "Oh how you’ve failed, Pale Lady!" mean? At first I thought Swain somehow took control of Beatrice, but later understood it wasn't that, because she was willingly giving him the power. So who is the pale lady?
: Never One Contest Entry: Purple Star
Haha, I find it funny that you used a bit oh rhyme as well. XD As for the story, it was really interesting. I really like that you tried to expand on her origin lore. In fact I considered doing this myself, but ultimately decided that I want to capture her and Pix' friendship. I have one small criticism if I may, but it may very well be subjective. In my view Lulu isn't a romance type of character, so her and Veigar blushing at each other felt a bit forced to me. The word MY in "That's My Purple Star" felt really cheesy. Other than that, it was a great story and I wouldn't be surprised if she got a lore update sounding similar to what you wrote!
Masantha (EUW)
: [Fan Fiction Contest] Never One, Without the Other…
I'm a bit confused about the deadline. Was it at 00:00 as soon as it turned 5th March or 00:00 when it turns 6th March. I'm asking because I posted at around 4 am on 5th and I have no clue if my submission is accepted.
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: > Gun godess deosn't seem to respect that though. It does though, each form keeps the same sihloette for both models and abilities, this means that no matter which form she chooses her model is instantly recognisable as miss fortune, and each ability is instantly recognisable... it’s an important aspect of skin design. > Also, I think such an obvious change like wing color changing from yellow to blue should be a strong enough visual cue Blue wouldn’t be eye catching enough, this is a very important cue (if kayle has gotten to this point it means she’s prob about to kill you all)... more so it needs to be recognisable, wings glowing yellow means your in trouble, something easily recognisable, > Of course, ideally I would prefer it if they changed her 3rd and 4th form altogether since they don't look like they belong to the same skin, but seeing how polished they are, I highly doubt Riot would be willing to do that. Not only is it a finished product and unlikely these forms are ones riot kinda have to go with, like I said gotta follow the same sihloette. > And speaking of her 3rd and 4th form. You mentioned that each champion should keep the same characteristics, but those forms look nothing like the previous ones. The colors change, the shapes change and her overall look in those armors look as if she was a very tanky champion, which we know she isn't. So if Riot cares so much about visual consistency, I think they should reconsider how those forms look in respect with her squishiness and style. It’s not consistency between different champions, but consistency with the same champion. A champion will have a given sihloette, as will every ability they have. These sihloettes are unique to that champion (no other champion or ability can have a similar sihloette) and must be followed for every skin. This means that even if your encountering a skin for the first time that champion can be looked at in a glance during a fight and be instantly recognisable, as with all of their abilities. For example gun goddess miss fortune. None of her forms change her that much, still the same overall shape which is shared among ever miss fortune skin... more so every ability follows the same basic looks that all miss fortune abilities have, just different partial effects and colours. This means GGMF is recognisable as MF no matter what, and all of her abilities are instantly recognisable. Same with kayle, each one of her forms have to be similar across every skin to show the correct infomation, this means that the overall designs for each transformation has to be consistent... this limits skin design but in the end gameplay is way more important than a skin.
You missed my point, but it doesn't really matter. This debate won't yield any kind of results no matter which side is right.
: If there’s something visual that indicates an important part of a champion’s kit it has to stay consistent through every skin regardless of whether it hurts the skin or not... an example being bard, his skins can’t change the colour of the stasis effect his ult does due to clarity which was a decision riot made in pbe. Kayle has a 4 part transformation, every skin kayle has needs to have this transformation and more so has to maintain the same silhouette for each transformation for every skin. So every kayle skin must have one set of wings and armour levels 1-10, 3 wings level 11-15, and 3 glowing wings and two swords at level 16+... this has to stay consistent for every skin kayle has and will ever have, as per riot’s design policy. Gameplay must take priority over skins every time
Gun godess deosn't seem to respect that though. Also, I think such an obvious change like wing color changing from yellow to blue should be a strong enough visual cue. Of course, ideally I would prefer it if they changed her 3rd and 4th form altogether since they don't look like they belong to the same skin, but seeing how polished they are, I highly doubt Riot would be willing to do that. And speaking of her 3rd and 4th form. You mentioned that each champion should keep the same characteristics, but those forms look nothing like the previous ones. The colors change, the shapes change and her overall look in those armors look as if she was a very tanky champion, which we know she isn't. So if Riot cares so much about visual consistency, I think they should reconsider how those forms look in respect with her squishiness and style.
Èclair (EUNE)
: They won't because her evolution isn't exclusively visual, it has ties into her power-spikes. Visual cues are important part of League's gameplay - making it a toggle would be counter-productive.
I do agree with you, however those can be addressed as I have previously mentioned in another reply: > While I do agree visual cues are important, I also believe the issue can be solved by giving the players other visual indicators of her power: adding 2 small wingblades to her side similar to her third form, making the wing glow stronger, making the wings glow blue instead of yellow, etc. There are plenty of easy fixes to this issue.
: The idea of the transformations is to clearly show what stage her passive is at... which is extremly important due to how impactful that passive can be. If you transform back you distrupt the whole point of the transformations... so no it’s a bad idea to mess with transformations that aren’t purely cosmetic
While I do agree visual cues are important, I also believe the issue can be solved by giving the players other visual indicators of her power: adding 2 small wingblades to her side similar to her third form, making the wing glow stronger, making the wings glow blue instead of yellow, etc. There are plenty of easy fixes to this issue.
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ThePikol (EUNE)
: It's amazing bro! I know that feel, I wouldn't know if should would paint either. Can I ask what is air drying modeling dough?
I'm not too sure myself. Seems to be pretty similar to lute, but it dries on contact with air. It is sold as a product for kids similar to plasticine. I used the one sold by ToyCOLOR.
Wen294 (EUW)
: > [{quoted}](name=Moonlord Shpitzy,realm=EUNE,application-id=Mpd1UjGe,discussion-id=Iziquwb5,comment-id=,timestamp=2018-01-08T17:35:22.131+0000) > Right now I'm trying to decide if to paint it or not. The classical feeling of wanting to improve it by adding colour but being afraid of ruining what you already have.
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: [Skin Visual Upgrade] Aether Wing Kayle
: You all have so many problems. You get awesome skins will good theme and looks. But oh wait{{champion:4}} sit's with different splash art and only simple model change on his skin. And it still costs 1820rp. If they refuse to update that, then you won't get it aswell.
The skin you're talking about can't even be purchased normally anymore. It's legacy.
: [Skin Visual Upgrade] Aether Wing Kayle
It is true, he could also use some improvement, especially since it's an Ultimate skin, but I do feel Aether Wing Kayle needs more improvement.
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