Christea (EUW)
: Never One Contest Entry: Warwick & Soraka
Lovely work. Congrats on the top 16! Constructive criticism... actually, mostly just some suggested corrections (in bold). * I'd have liked to see some more direct thought/emotion from both characters - even single lines, like a "heartbeat" of internal thoughts spacing the text. As it is, it reads more like a journal (though a powerful/intimate one); but I realise that was probably your intent. * "their twisted desires **unwove** the careful designs of their fates. **Soraka's** desire was to fix the mortal **beings'** broken **tapestries**" * "his life **began** to fade. She had long grown weary **of** passively guiding * "echoing the **icy** cold grave" GL in the voting!
: Never One Contest Entry: The "dark" adventures of Lulu and Pix
I wanted to write you a more detailed review, but I honestly can't say much. I'm not very good at rhyme/verse/etc so I won't comment on that. Constructive criticism! * "She **wondered** the woods" - should be **wandered**, I assume. Maybe not? It's Lulu after all. * You didn't go much into the darker themes of Lulu (or the "fair folk" of mythology in general). There was a hint of it with, "Imprisoned in the towers," and, "All thoughts go to waste," and I hoped for more sinister lines like these. I realise it's meant to be light and whimsical though. Really nice work. I'm surprised this one didn't make the finalists.
: “Never One Contest Entry: prima facie”
You've really captured an otherworldly and cosmic atmosphere in your writing (which is perfect for Zilean and Vel). It has a mythological feel which I love - if you ever played _Morrowind_ or read the lore, some of its in-game books have a similar style and it works so well for a "weird" setting or subject. Constructive criticism! * North is just "north," the city is just "the city," its ruler is just "the ruler," etc. References to more defined names/locations could emphasise the weirdness of Zilean and Vel's perspectives. I actually like this about your writing, but it might read as vague or disjointed for casual readers. * More moments of "live" dialogue/thoughts, even if it's just a few words to help give the characters personality. As you did with Zilean's "**I feel like I've done this before**," and Vel's acknowledgement. These two moments were great. * Your tenses are mixed up in several places. Eg, "Zilean **drifted** through time. The more he **tries**" - that should be **drifts** and **tries**, or **drifted** and **tried**, if you want to be consistent. But... you may have done this deliberately (because, Zilean) in which case you're a genius. Overall I loved your entry. GL in the future.
Zaffron (EUW)
: [Fan Fiction Contest] Final 16 Announced: Vote Now for the Winner!
A suggestion for those who're discouraged by not making the final 16: don't take Riot's writing/forum staff as the ultimate authority on creative writing, grammar, or fantasy fiction. I gather it was a subjective judgement based on fairly narrow criteria in the context of a single fantasy universe (and in fairly stressful circumstances for the amount of content they had to review); not being top 16 doesn't mean your writing is poor, nor are they necessarily the best source of constructive criticism. Case in point: some official League lore isn't particularly well written - or in any case could be improved upon - and the writers' use of English isn't always perfect (there are multiple errors in this announcement post!). _This is in no way intended as a flame towards the staff._ Fanfic competitions are a great idea and take a lot of thankless effort to organise, especially with so many entries and in such a short time period. Just don't feel like Tolkien or R. E. Howard has personally trashed your work if you didn't win. Hell, if any of you want some advice from a random internet person I'd be happy to comment on your entries.
Sprongle (EUW)
: I just read your entry, and jeez - it's so beautifully written! Regardless of the competition or the placements, you should seriously be very proud of it.
> [{quoted}](name=Sprongle,realm=EUW,application-id=IRLJz88n,discussion-id=xK72R9s0,comment-id=000c0000,timestamp=2019-03-18T19:38:16.715+0000) > > I just read your entry, and jeez - it's so beautifully written! Regardless of the competition or the placements, you should seriously be very proud of it. Thank you! I entered mostly as a little challenge to myself (ie, motivate myself to write something, for a change), so the process was more valuable to me than the recognition - or lack of - from the staff here. I really appreciate you taking the time, though. Your entry was excellent, by the way.
Zaffron (EUW)
: [Fan Fiction Contest] Final 16 Announced: Vote Now for the Winner!
RIP my story. Well done to the top 16 though, GL guys!
: Never One Contest Entry: To Know Oneself
To add some context, this is set during the time between Riven's sentencing in Ionia (_Confessions of a Broken Blade_), and fighting in an arena in Noxus (_Awaken_ cinematic). I assumed that due to Neeko's nature she could turn up almost anywhere, for any reason.
kivea (EUW)
: Never One Contest Entry: A Warmother and her Beast
I really enjoyed this one, being a big fan of Sejuani & Bristle. Especially like how you transitioned between the two scenes.
Masantha (EUW)
: [Fan Fiction Contest] Never One, Without the Other…
Edit: Never mind, question was answered elsewhere. Good luck everyone.
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Masantha (EUW)
: Hello UK Players!
Greetings from the cold and rainy north! Q: You mentioned being a Morgana main; what is your favourite Morgana skin, and why is it Bewitching Morgana?
Exiiono (EUW)
: Rune "settings" reset.
I have the same issue as the OP. {{sticker:sg-janna}}
: Visual Health Bug
I've noticed this too, on a turret's health bar.
: Thanks for reminding just how dark LoL is with the newest comic riot
I agree, it's surprisingly dark and thought-provoking lately. I'm loving the new lore. That said, I think you're overstating the tragedy of some champions, eg.: {{champion:113}} - Is really just as tough as nails and brutal as hell. I see Sej as the archetypical northern barbarian conquerer/slayer. I don't get any sense that she regrets her lifestyle or is self-pitying at all. {{champion:117}} - I don't know if the faeries are really to blame for Lulu, especially considering that she gained significant power due to her affinity for the faerieland/wyld/chaos(?). And she wasn't sent forward in time by a malicious act; time just flows differently in that place. _Edit: The Febos already covered this one!_ That said, champions don't have to be victims, or suffering, for their stories (and roles in the setting) to be pretty dark. {{champion:223}} A murderous river-god/demon . . . {{champion:31}} An eldritch abomination . . . {{champion:143}} A woman's body used as a puppet by a malicious plant-entity . . . {{champion:203}} _Peaceful_ Death and _violent_ Death . . . {{champion:35}} A murderclown . . . . . . and . . . this guy. {{champion:6}}
: Ahri adc Level 1 to Diamond, new Twitch.tv channel!
Caught the stream earlier, it's good stuff. More interactive and higher quality than most established and popular streams I've seen. There was no trolling or inting involved.
Lavenora (EUW)
: Caitlyn
Nice work! {{sticker:slayer-pantheon-thumbs}}

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