CurseOfLife (EUNE)
: Its my 2nd language also. Here is how you can practice. Imagine a situation you want to tell, put yourself in there, turn some instrumental music that feels like your story should and experience it. Start slowly writing. If you feel like you are choking somewhere go back to your native language and after it start translating it into english and decorating. So you want to tell how Sona got to be part of the crew. Last thing she remembers is that she was inside a cave when the scythes attacked her.. Why was she there? Why is she lonely? Why are they after her? Is she guarding something, looking for something, or she fled there from them? Also thats a big/high cave if ships can go through it so you can try picturing and painting the picture of it, adding your 1st lines to it about the crystals. Why would Jinx and crew come to save her? Are they heading somewhere? Why would she join some randoms? Maybe Jinx chased the others into the caves and sona just happened to be there. Why would Jinx want her as a member of her ship? Maybe add malphs reaction since he is best buds with Jinx or she is asking sona while annoying malph who doesnt mind it at all.. showing their character also :) You see there are so many questions left unanswered after reading it. By asking questions you create depth. Have fun :)
> [{quoted}](name=CurseOfLife,realm=EUNE,application-id=IRLJz88n,discussion-id=EmdyLizd,comment-id=000000000000,timestamp=2018-09-30T13:20:24.379+0000) > > Its my 2nd language also. Here is how you can practice. Imagine a situation you want to tell, put yourself in there, turn some instrumental music that feels like your story should and experience it. Start slowly writing. If you feel like you are choking somewhere go back to your native language and after it start translating it into english and decorating. > > So you want to tell how Sona got to be part of the crew. Last thing she remembers is that she was inside a cave when the scythes attacked her.. Why was she there? Why is she lonely? Why are they after her? Is she guarding something, looking for something, or she fled there from them? Also thats a big/high cave if ships can go through it so you can try picturing and painting the picture of it, adding your 1st lines to it about the crystals. > Why would Jinx and crew come to save her? Are they heading somewhere? > Why would she join some randoms? Maybe Jinx chased the others into the caves and sona just happened to be there. Why would Jinx want her as a member of her ship? Maybe add malphs reaction since he is best buds with Jinx or she is asking sona while annoying malph who doesnt mind it at all.. showing their character also :) > > You see there are so many questions left unanswered after reading it. By asking questions you create depth. > Have fun :) Thanks, but I'm not really the writer type ^^' I'm a cosplayer and artist mainly.
CurseOfLife (EUNE)
: Where is the story? No depth. I felt nothing while reading it. I feel like this one is mostly you trying to show off your wordplay. Don't know why it's the most upvoted. I had hoped to be moved by something and probably my expectations were high after seeing the vote count. Sorry, but had to comment since nobody else would that upvoted/dwted it.
> [{quoted}](name=CurseOfLife,realm=EUNE,application-id=IRLJz88n,discussion-id=EmdyLizd,comment-id=0000,timestamp=2018-09-30T01:24:55.207+0000) > > Where is the story? No depth. > I felt nothing while reading it. > I feel like this one is mostly you trying to show off your wordplay. > Don't know why it's the most upvoted. > I had hoped to be moved by something and probably my expectations were high after seeing the vote count. > Sorry, but had to comment since nobody else would that upvoted/dwted it. Well dude, when English isn't your first language it isn't the easiest to write poignantly. But thank you for the advice!
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